Bonjour , alors j'ai un Dm pour demain je les fait mais pouvais vous regarder si il y a des fautes SVP ! Je vais vous expliquer un peut le sujet alors je doit raconter un grand evenement dans un journal intime , je doit utilier je ,des adj t verbe de sentiments et utilier le preterit ! le texte si dessous :

My dear diary

Friday , march 6th 2010

i was surprised when my sister said that she was pregnant with triplets . the november 6 th was great evenement , three small babies were born two boys and one girl their name was Thomas , Lily and Simon but they were born premature ,at the end of 5 months and half of pregnancy they were bom and we passed 4 months at the hopital , it was very very hard because we were afraid to lose them ..I was moved and happy have nephews . I could carry Lily march 6th 2009 . I joy cried

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  • PAU64
  • Modératrice Junior
2013-02-03T15:17:37+01:00

Je te le réecris en enlevant quelques fautes ;-) 

Met bien les majuscules et les ponctuations, comme moi :-)

 

My dear diary,

 

Friday, March 6th 2010

 

 

I was surprised when my sister said that she was pregnant with triplets. The November 6th was  a great evenement, three small babies were born, two boys and one girl. Their name was : Thomas, Lily and Simon but they were born premature, at the end of the 5th months and half of pregnancy they were born and we passed 4 months at the hospital. It was very hard because we were afraid to lose them... I was moved and happy have nephews. I could carry Lily on March 6th 2009. I joy cried.

 

Goog bye my diary

 

Ton évènement est très bien raconté il y a peu de fautes d'orthographe.

Si c'est noté je pense que tu vas avoir une excellente note ;-)

 

J'espère t'avoir aider :-D