J'ai besoin d'aide en Anglais pour une rédaction à faire

In the northern part of Austin there once dwelt an honest family by the
name of Smothers. The family consisted of John Smothers, his wife,
himself, their little daughter, five years of age, and her parents,
making six people toward the population of the city when counted for a
special write-up, but only three by actual count.

One night after supper the little girl was seized with a severe colic,
and John Smothers hurried down town to get some medicine.

He never came back.

The little girl recovered and in time grew up to womanhood.

The mother grieved very much over her husband's disappearance, and it
was nearly three months before she married again, and moved to San
Antonio.

The little girl also married in time, and after a few years had rolled
around, she also had a little girl five years of age.

She still lived in the same house where they dwelt when her father had
left and never returned.

One night by a remarkable coincidence her little girl was taken with
cramp colic on the anniversary of the disappearance of John Smothers,
who would now have been her grandfather if he had been alive and had a
steady job.

"I will go downtown and get some medicine for her," said John Smith (for
it was none other than he whom she had married).

"No, no, dear John," cried his wife. "You, too, might disappear forever,
and then forget to come back."

So John Smith did not go, and together they sat by the bedside of little
Pansy (for that was Pansy's name).

After a little Pansy seemed to grow worse, and John Smith again
attempted to go for medicine, but his wife would not let him.

Suddenly the door opened, and an old man, stooped and bent, with long
white hair, entered the room.

"Hello, here is grandpa," said Pansy. She had recognized him before any
of the others.

The old man drew a bottle of medicine from his pocket and gave Pansy a
spoonful.

She got well immediately.

"I was a little late," said John Smothers, "as I waited for a street
car."

" Imagine a continuation of the strange story in which you will include a conversation between Pansy and Grandfather and her parents.

Will you provide an explanation to John's disappearance or will the story take off again thanks to new strange developements. Make your choice ( 150 Words)

Le faire au passé !

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2013-01-13T21:12:15+01:00

Salut!,  je te propose une suite:

 

Everyone stopped and went silent, but the mother threw herself into her father's arms, and cried of suprise and mixed emotions wile John laughed.

" Well well! what a suprise you must be better since you can walk now!"

"But father, what do you mean, i walk all the time, where have you been all these years?"

" All these years! i've only been gone an hour or so! But my god you have grown alot since my absence!"

Her daughter sayed to him that she was a grow woman now and that her daughter was here. John Smothers laught again of suprise saying that he thought his grandaughter was his daughter when he came in and gave her the medicine... 

Tu peux par exemple continer sur cette route, en disant que John s'était bloqué dans le passé pendant que le reste de sa famille vivait normalement. J'espère que ça t'aideras!:)