Bonjour, je dois faire un texte sur mes vacances d'été, si une bonne âme passe par là et veux bien me corriger mon texte et m'expliquer mes erreurs qui doivent probablement être nombreuses :). Merci d'avance.

During my holidays, I went to Spain, to Lloret de Mar, a town in the county of La Selva in the province of Girona in Catalonia, the first week of July with my mother. In particular, we visited the Santa Clotilde's garden and the the Sant Joan's Castle. It was situated at the top of the hill wich separeted the beaches of Lloret de Mar and Fenals and dated back to the beginning of the 11th century. It was really nice. The rest of the time we went to the beach. Back in France, I read a lot of books. I even tried one in English but it was a disaster. -maybe i will understand one day but not tomorrow and not the next week-. I went walking with my dog, likewise and went to the cinema. I also watched at the holidays notebook on the school's website.

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2014-09-10T17:00:25+02:00
Coucou, 
C'est bien globalement mais la première phrase est un peu longue tu pourrais la reformuler. "During my holiday, I went to Spain with my mother the first week of July. We were in Lloret de Mar, a town in the county of La Selva in the province of Girona in Catalonia." Bien que ça soit très détaillé ;) 
Pour la 2eme phrase enlève le "In particular". 
Pour les livres c'est un peu mal dit... "I even tried to read one in English but it was a disaster, I didn't understand. I hope one day I will be able to understand but I think I have to work a little bit my English before" Ca change un peu mais c'est mieux dit.
Ensuite "I walked the dog (every day) and I went to the cinema" et pour la dernière phrase pas besoin du "at"
Voilà j'espère que ça t'aura aidé et si tu ne comprends pas un truc que j'ai marqué ou autre n'hésite pas a demander. ;)
Je pensais bien que certaines phrases étaient bancales. Merci pour ta rapidité et pour ton aide surtout :).
De rien :D