Bonjour, e dois préparer un oral en anglais, je les réalisée mais je pense qu'il y a des fautes, j'aurai aimée savoir si vous pouvez m'aider a corriger.
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I'm going to present the notion places and forms of power. The power is a right or an authority given or delegated to a person or a body. During this exposision I'm going to discuss about this question: what's the real power of music ?
First I will introduce the power of protest song in the society. Then in a second step the benefits has music for society and the people.

Today, there are different types of songs that exist such as the « Protest songs » that have taken an important place in the past.
The words of Protestant songs contain messages sometimes directly stated, sometimes audible allusions and indirect messages (often under dictatorships, where things can not be said directly) that the population understands; the song they are accessible to all short, simple texts, which can be understood by all, even without having had a great education, they store easily and can be taken everywhere and memorized by everyone. Music has lyrics associated with a message can have a universal dimension because music transmits and can transmit emotions and ideals. The song can be exported outside the areas where it is prohibited and have a global impact.
For exemple their are music who are exert power on government. There are « Get up stand up » from Bob Marley, a singer who was born in Jamaica, he lived in a ghetto, he was poor. He protested against poverty and wanted people to defend their rights.
There are « Give peace a chance » from John Lennon, a singer who was born in Liverpool in 1940. In this song, he protested against war because at this time, it was the Vietnam war. John Lennon means that he does not want to defend any specific ideology. The only thing wich is important for him is peace.

Music can change people's mantality.
Some people appreciate singers and their music, and they become "fans." The "fans" are those who follow the singers and their music, the ideas they convey in their music, and their ambitions and fight in different situations. When hundreds of fans come together there is a sharing of values​​, and a power of thoughts when crowd sings chorus of protest. This creates a collective commitment. Music can bring people together and unify them. There is a solidarity that develops between people and cohesion at different levels. For example in national level between a friend group, or international level between fans who lives in different countries.For example the song « happy » from Pharell Williams was taken all over the world.
The groupie is an example, a fan of a particular band or musician, who will follow them on concert tours.
Music fans can differ somewhat from fans of particular musicians, in that they may focus on a genre of music. Many of the trade journals around music, such as Rolling Stone, were created by music fans.

For conclude, to my mind, music allow to people to express their opinions and make react the other people for they manifest and they move the world.
In extreme cases, this can lead to celebrity worship syndrome, stalking behavior.


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2016-04-11T07:31:39+02:00
I'm going to present the notion "places and forms of power" (use quotation marks for the notion). The ( article "the" used when mentioning a specific power or one you had mentioned earlier) power is a right or an authority given or delegated to a person or a body. During this exposition I'm going to discuss about (don't use "discuss" with "about") the question: what's the real power of music? (how powerful is music/ what is the extent of the power in music?)
First I will introduce the power of protest song in the society. Then in a second step the benefits music has for society and the people.

Today, there are different types of songs that exist (use a comma) such as the "Protest songs" that have taken an important place in the past. (have taken an important place in the society)
The words of Protestant songs contain messages sometimes directly stated, sometimes audible allusions and indirect messages (often under dictatorships, where things can not be said directly) that the population understands; the songs  they are accessible to all, in short, simple texts, which can be understood by all, even without having had a great education, they stored easily and can be taken everywhere and memorized by anyone (avoid writing very long sentence that can easily lead to mistakes). Music has lyrics associated with a message and  can have a universal dimension because music transmits and can transmit emotions and ideals. The song can be exported outside the areas where it is prohibited and have a global impact.
For example their are music who ("who" is a pronoun for people.In this case you use which) were used to exert pressure on government. There examples included; "Get up stand up" by Bob Marley, a singer who was born in Jamaica, he lived in a ghetto, he was poor. He protested against poverty and wanted people to defend their rights.
Also on the list is "Give peace a chance"  by John Lennon, a singer who was born in Liverpool in 1940. In this song, he protested against war because at this time, it(here this pronoun refers to the time you mentioned, so you should write: the Vietnam war was going on) was the Vietnam war. John Lennon means that he does not want to defend any specific ideology. The only important thing for him is peace.

Music can change people's mentality.
Some people appreciate singers and their music, and they become "fans." The "fans" are those who follow the singers and their music, the ideas they convey in their music, and their ambitions and fight in different situations. When hundreds of fans come together there is a sharing of values​​, and a power of thoughts when crowd sings chorus of protest. This creates a collective commitment. Music can bring people together and unify them. There is a solidarity that develops between people and cohesion at different levels. For example in national level among groups of friends, or international level between fans who lives in different countries.For example the song  "happy" by Pharell Williams was taken all over the world.
The groupie is an example, fans of a particular band or musician, who will follow them on concert tours.
Music fans can differ somewhat from other fans of particular musicians, in that they may focus on a genre of music. Many of the trade journals around music, such as Rolling Stone, were created by music fans.

To conclude, to my mind (in my view), music allows (use continuous tense)  people to express their opinions and make them react to the other people for they manifest and move the world.
In extreme cases, this can lead to celebrity worship syndrome and  stalking behavior.