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MYTHS AND HEROES

I am going to talk about the notion myths and heroes.

First of all, I would like to give a quick definition of that notion.

A myth can be defined as an ancient story about gods and heroes.

It can be a popular belief or a tradition or a false notion. A hero can be a mythological figure, a person who is admired for his achievements, a super-hero or maybe a role model or an icon. So he is tipically identified with goods qualities.

Why do we need heroes?

This notion can split in two categories: imaginary’s myths and heroes

Reality’s myths and heroes

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The identity of a nation is forged thanks myths dating back to ancient times.

Know these myths help us understand our present.

These myths are supported by the floor or in books.

I would start with heroes can be found in books…

à Heroes like Sherlock Holmes (created by Sir CanDoyle), Dorian gray (by Oscar Wild), Romeo and Juliet, two heroes created by Shakspeare.

Hamlet, of Shakspeare is a classic. It is studied in many schools. Everyone knows the famous sentence "to be or not to be, that is the question"

I think I could give many other examples

There are a lot of fictional heroes in literature and this influences many people. They make us dream.

These heroes that I have just mentioned have been interpreted in different forms in order to maintain the myth. They are found today on television, alongside the greatest super heroes.

Every body knows spiderman, batman, superman, ironeman..

They are the most significant heroes. They wear masks and capes and they want to fight real crime.

à Other myths and heroes form a part of the Anglo-Saxon cultural identity. There are also many heroes represented in museums, on boards, in the street thanks to billboards.

I would like to mention a very famous painting: “American gothic”

This board/work painting by grantwood in thousand nine hundred and thirty refers to the great depression that Americans have suffered. This farmer represent the economic context of that time.

This myth is a historic moment, so real.

Which leads us to believe that there is a close link between myth and reality.

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Now I’ m going to talk about heroes existing.

à Oprah winfrey is a pure incarnation of the American dream because, started with nothing, she became one the most influential woman of the country.

Michael Jackson also embodies this dream.

He was the first afro-american who has is video-clip passed on the MusicChanelMTV

Him and his songs form the myth of American Pop Music.

In the same way, the films were realized on him so as not to forget it.

Now, I want to talk about others heroes, heroes that we can see in the street without recognizing.

I mean everyday’s heroes.

I would like to give any examples.

After the attentat of the 11 september, many fireman, called the 9/11 have risk their lives to save others.

Another example: the current super-heros on association named “super-heroes anonymous” protecting the poor of new-york, at night, in the street.

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2016-04-20T16:25:51+02:00

I am going to talk about the notion myths and heroes.

First of all, I would like to give a quick definition of this (as you are referring to  a subject just mentioned) notion.

A myth can be defined as an ancient story about gods and heroes.

It can be a popular belief or a tradition or a false notion. A hero can be a mythological figure, a person who is admired for his achievements, a super-hero or maybe a role model or an icon. So he/she is typically identified with good qualities.

Why do we need heroes?

This notion can split in two categories: imaginary’s myths and heroes

Reality’s myths and heroes (real life myths and heroes or imagined/made up myths and heroes)

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The identity of a nation is forged thanks to myths makes up its history.

Therefore we can say that myths helps us understand our present.

These myths are supported by the floor or in books. (These myths are carried down from generation to generation through oral means or via books.

I will (an action that you are carrying out) start with heroes that can be found in books

(incorrect use of ellipses) Heroes like Sherlock Holmes (created by Sir CanDoyle), Dorian gray (by Oscar Wild), Romeo and Juliet, two heroes created by Shakspeare (continue or mention something about them) are some of the examples of heroes that were created and transmitted through books).

Hamlet, of Shakespeare, is a classic. It is studied in many schools. Everyone knows the famous sentence "to be or not to be, that is the question"

There are many examples of such heroes that can be mentioned and one would not be able to name them all. (the previous sentence was hanging)

There are a lot of fictional heroes in literature who have,over the years, influenced our thinking and dreams.

These heroes that I have just mentioned have been interpreted in different forms in order to maintain the myth. They are found today on television, alongside other great super heroes like Spiderman, Batman, Superman, and Ironman just to mention a few of the many famous heroes. These are some of the most significant fictional heroes in today's society. They wear masks and capes and are always ready to fight crime.

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Other myths and heroes arise from the Anglo-Saxon cultural identity. There are also many other forms of heroes represented (presented or displayed) in museums, on boards, and in the street thanks to billboards.

I would like to mention (talk about) a very famous painting: the (you are speaking of a specific painting hence the use of this article)“American Gothic”

This board/work painting by grantwood in thousand nine hundred and thirty (1930: "nineteen thirty") refers to the great depression that Americans have suffered. The farmer portrayed in the painting represents the economic context of that time.

This myth is a historic moment, a real life occurrence that took place in the '30s..

Which leads us to believe that there is a close link between myths and reality.

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Now I’ m going to talk about modern day heroes.

à Oprah Winfrey, is one example, who is a pure incarnation of the American dream because (no use of comma needed)  she  started with nothing and ended up becoming one the most influential woman of the country.

Michael Jackson also embodies this dream.He was the first Afro-American to have his video-clip passed onto the Music Chanel MTV.He and his songs formed the myth of American Pop Music.

In the same way, there were films created about  him so as not to make his memory live..

Now, I want to talk about others forms of heroes; heroes that we can find in the street who are not usually recognized for their heroism.I mean the everyday's heroes.

Examples of such heroes include; the people who help others during disasters such as the 9/11. During the incident of the 11 September, where the Twin Towers in America were attacked by terrorists, many firemen and civilians, risked their lives to save others.

Another example: the current super-heroes from the association called “super-heroes anonymous” who protect the poor people of New-York, at night, in the street.

Note: try not to write short sentences that are hanging.