J'ai besoin d'aide pour corriger mon devoir d'anglais (redac de vacances de Pâques)

Je crois que j'ai corrigé toutes les fautes, en tout cas c'est un bon travail, il y avait juste quelques maladresses à quelques endroits!
During my easter holidays, the first week, I stayed at home to do my homework and to play video games. Sometimes I was playing soccer with my brother and my father beause the weather was sunny. I was watching T.V very late of course, with the permission of my parents then I woke up late. The last week, we went to Paris in car. We went to the Eiffel Tower, Concorde, Notre-Dame, Madeleine Church, Triumphal arch . We walked in the Champs-Elysees, Les Invalides and finally we went to Disneyland.
We took a lot of photos. At night we met our friends and had dinner together. At the end of the day we were very tired.
I bought a very cheap shoes and a Mickey Mouse bell.
We had some great time. Paris is a beautiful city.


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