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I just come home after this evening with Jamie at Peabody hotel, and I’m so joyful!

At the beginning, he told me his travel in Australia. He was open-minded, always happy to discover the world… Then he told me that in a few weeks, he ‘ll go to the war.
I guess he could tell me all his life, but after having offered me a glass, he asked me to go dancing. I could not refuse!

He gaves me a real moment of happiness. We have dance rock, and jazz. The atmosphere was electric between us. He was so different of his brother, Henry who was (la je veux dire qui me faisait la cour, ou qui me draguait....)

With Jamie it was like I could forget everything in his arms. On the dancefloor, he made me laugh with funny remarks about the way I dance , he was gentle with me and at the same time excited! Helding me by the waist, he was twirling me, and stroking my hair with his fingers.
He intimidated me, looking at me with his penetrating look.

At the end of the dance, he gaves me a radiant smile and ask me to follow him.

So, we go out and walk together, hand in hand, and we stop in a park. There were so many flowers, it was like a dream. Then He pulled me against him, kissed me, and whispered in my ear : “At my return of the war, I promise to always be there by your side. I know that during my absence you’ll need love but I ask you to wait for me because if I could, I’ll go wherever you’ll go…”
His voice was a beautiful melody. I liked that this moment lasts forever, but all good things come to an end.

Now I have to think about Henry, because if I choose Jamie, I don’t want to hurt him… But in the same time, I don’t know yet if I’ll have the courage to wait as long as the end of the war…

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2012-11-06T14:41:02+01:00

I just came home this night with Jamie at Peabody hotel, and I'm so joyfull ! 

 

At the beginning, he told me about his travel in Australia? He was open-minden, always keen on discovering the world... Then he told me that in a few weeks, he'll go to war.

I juess he could tell me all his life,  but after offering me a glass, he asked me to dance. I could not refuse ! He gaves me a real moment of happiness. We danced, rock, and jazz. The atmosphere was electric between us. He was so different of his brother, Henry, who was always courting me. With Jamie, it was like I could forget everything in his arms. On the dancefloor, he made me laugh with funny remarks about the way I dance. He acted like a gentleman with me, and excited at the same time. Helding me by the waist, he was twirling me and he strocked my hair with his fingers.

He intimidated me, looking at me with his penetratring look.

At the end of the dance, he gaves me a radiant smile and he asked me to follow him, so we went out and walked together, hand by hand, and we stopped in the park. There were so many flowers, it was like a dream. Then he pulled me against him, he kissed me, and whispered to my ear << When I'll come back from the war, I promise I'll always be there by your side. I know that during my absence you'll need love but I ask you to wait for me because if I could, I'll go wherever you(ll go...>>

His voice was a beautifiul melody. I liked that this moment lasts forever but all good things come to an end.

Now I have to think about Henry, because however I choose Jamie, I don't want to hurt him. But I don't know yet if I'll have the courage to wait as long as the end of the war.

 

 

 

 

 

Bon voila, j'ai essayé de faire au mieux. Je suis en 2nde.