Pouvez vous me dire si ma lettre de motivation et bien et si il y a des faute je suis noté (3éme) Dear sir or Madam i am writing to apply for the job of pastry which you advertised recently in the newspaper i am 15 years old and a student at voltaire junior high school. i live 5 minute of pastry . i m interested in this job because i love cakes and i do well cakes i have already worked for 5 years in a bakery pastry in the united states i have heard good things about your pastry i like being in contact with the customers i am kind generous friendly and smily . i can work after school hours and at week ends .i'm ready to work very hard i would be brilliant to for the job thank you for your time and attention sincerly

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2014-01-16T21:54:20+01:00
 Dear sir or Madam,                                                                                                               I'm writing to apply for the job of pastry which you advertised recently in the newspaper. I'm 15 years student at Voltaire junior high school. I live 5 minutes of pastry. I'm interested by this job because, I love cakes and I do well cakes. I have already  worked for 5 years in a bakery pastry  in the United  States. I've heard good things about your pastry. I like being in contact with the customers and I'm kind, generous, friendly and smily. I can work after school and during the weekend. I'm ready to work very hard. I would be brilliant for the job. Thank you for your time and attention,
                                                                                               Sincerly your,  
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2014-01-16T21:54:23+01:00


Si tu es en 3è, ça veut dire que t es au collège donc ce n'est pas High School mais Grammar school.

I have already worked 5 years (pas le FOR)

With customers (supprime le THE)

I'm reading (Il faut rajouter le ING)

I would be brillant to the job (pas le FOR)

Sincerely

Sinon, c'est pas mal ^^

I have heard c'est juste. Heart c'est coeur, heard c'est entendu.
Oui c'est vrai merci ^^' Dslée
merci a vous 2
Je t'en prie ^^