Si vous plaît j'ai vraiment besoin d'aide pour ce dialogue entre une personne victime de racisme et et son accusatrice 20 ans après les faits pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger les fautes merci d'avance:

-Hello it's been years that you moved in new district and we are to speak only once, I would have liked learning to know each other(to be self-aware) of advantage so that we become friendly. Says the narrator call out(question) to the girl.


-I wanted him(it) also only when I had just moved you and your friend had rejected me at once of has my skin color. Does a physical difference imply(does involve) a difference in the capacity in the knowledge? In other words are we more intelligent because we have the white skin? You rejected me, today I reconstructed and I have has learnt to become stronger. Assert the girl with tears in the eyes


- Yes I remember it and I regret him(it) I was young and stupid I apologize I hope that you forgive me and that we can begin again has zero. These words cannot express to what extent I am sorry, and how much he(it) is necessary for me to apologize to you, sadden to have offended you with my pointless and tactless word. Pronounce the embarrassed narrator.



- I accept your excuses however we can never be real friends because I too long suffered in this city.

" We are not born racist, we become him "

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c'est-à-dire ?
bah je pense que pour ça c'est bon mais pour tous qui est conjugaison c'est plus dut
dur *
ok et merci
de rien :)

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2014-07-25T12:04:05+02:00
J'ai corrigé tes fautes (en souligné) et réécris les passages maladroits. Pour info quand tu écris des dialogues rapportés, il ne faut pas inverser le sujet et le verbe comme en français. "je suis un gentil garçon, dit-il." = "I'm a nice boy, he said."
Par ailleurs, c'est bien d'utiliser des signes de ponctuation pour mieux comprendre le sens de tes phrases et pour permettre au lecteur de respirer un peu ;) La prochaine fois essaye de placer des virgules et des points. Les Anglophones n'aiment pas beaucoup les longues phrases tortueuses. 

"Hello it's been years since you moved in a new district and we are to speak only once, the narrator said. I would have liked to become acquainted with you in order to become your friend. 

The teary-eyed girl asserted:
"I wanted him as well. But when I had just moved, you and your friend had rejected me because of the colour of my skin. Does a physical difference mean we don't have the same ability to learn? In other words, are we more intelligent because our skin is white? You rejected me and today I reconstructed and learned to become stronger


- Yes, I remember it and I regret what I did, the narrator responded. I was young and stupid, I apologize. I hope that you forgive me and that we can begin again has zero. These words cannot express how sorry I am (la suite est inutile car il a déjà dit qu'il était désolé donc il y a répétition). I am sad because I offended you with my pointless and tactless words.

- I accept your apologizes, however we will never be real friends because I have suffered too much in that city.

" We are not born racist, we become him "