Je dois écrire le début de l'histoire de Cendrillon, mais en version moderne, pourriez-vous me corriger s'il vous plaît ? Pas à l'aide du correcteur.

Merci.

There was once a beautiful girl named Cinderella. She lived in a large estate with his stepmother who was very rich and very ugly sisters two halves. Everyday, Cinderella had to clean, wash ferrari, shopping, ironing clothes, cooking for the whole family. She had not the right to touch the computer or watching television, all recreation was forbidden.

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It was once a beautiful girl named Cinderella. She lived in a large estate with his stepmother who was very rich and very ugly sisters two halves. Every day, Cinderella was clean, wash ferrari, shopping, ironing clothes, cooking for the whole family. She was not allowed to touch the computer or watching television, all fun was banned.

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2013-11-29T18:43:43+01:00
A partir de " every day " je mettrais plutôt : 

Every day, Cinderella was clean, wash ferrari, shopping, ironing clothes, cooking for the whole family.
2013-11-29T18:59:41+01:00
Tu a tout bon je les fait verifier par ma mere qui et prof  danglais 

C'est qu'elle n'a lu que la première et la dernière phrase!
ta un probleme caro67000
Il me semble y avoir des fautes dans ce texte mais c'est toi le spécialiste!