Bonjour, pouvez - vous me dire si dans ce texte que j'ai fait pour mon devoir d'anglais, si il y a des fautes me le dire et les corriger svp?

Steve Jobs was born at San Francisco in California on 24 february 1955. He died in 5 otober 2011 at Palo Atlo in California. He was an American. Steve Jobs was an engineer and a founder of the brand Apple. His job was to sold the Apple products. He has invented Apple brand. His invention is importe because he has revolutioner the world. The importante events during his lifetime it's: there was a terrible eartquake in 2010 at Haiti. An annecdote of Steve Jobs is: Steve Jobs was adopted he had saw his biological father without knew before he really meets him.

Voila. Merci de m'aider :)

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2013-05-02T16:06:12+02:00

his invention is important

et moi je mettrait : the must important event during his lifetime has this terrible eartquake at Haiti in 2010. 

Et sa parait assez court si c'est un écrit mais par contre si c'est un oral apprend bien ton texte :-)

 

Meilleure réponse !
2013-05-02T16:15:39+02:00

Steve Jobs was born at San Francisco in California on 24 february 1955. He died  5 otober 2011 at Palo Atlo in California. He was (an) American. Steve Jobs was an engineer and a founder of the brand Apple. His job was to sell  Apple products. He has invented Apple brand. His invention is important because he has revolutionized the world. During his lifetime  he importante events are: there was a terrible eartquake in 2010 at Haiti. An annecdote of Steve Jobs : Steve Jobs was adopted he had seen his biological father without knowing it before it really encounter.

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