Bonsoir, j'ai un oral d'anglais type bac à préparer pour la rentrée, sur la notion "Idea of progress".
Est-ce que globalement j'ai respecté ce qu'il faut? Est-ce que ma problématique est correcte? Merci d'avance. :)

Today I’m going to speak about the notion of the idea of progress which is a process of
improving or developping nearer to achieving something. There are several
areas : we have scientific progress, environmental progress, or social
progress. I’m going to talk about social progress and be focused on the women’s
rights.

Is it that there has been real progress in women's rights since the XIXthCentury ?
First, I’m going to talk about the development of women’s rights in the XIXth Century and in a 2nd part, I will explain the limits of their rights

In the XIXth Century , the woman was seen as inferior as the man. In fact men had the power over them, they were not treated on a equal footing, for instance when it’s about their wage. As we have studied in class, in the extract from Made in Dagenham, Mrs O’Grady and her co-workers are fighting for an equal pay between men and women. But since the beginning of the nineties, women’s salaries approach those of men little by little. Thanks to the Matrimonial Property Act, contraception, abortion and divorce became possible since
1968. We can noticed that abortion became possible in France in 1975 thanks to
a woman, Simone Veil. And in many countries, women have the right vote since the XXth Century.



However, this progress has limits : there is always the the glass ceiling. This last is a kind of discriminatory barrier that prevents women from rising to positions of power, it exists few bosses who are women. I can add that there are many jobs which are less readily available because considered as « man’s job » like in medicine or business.
Moreover, if wecan speak about progress in occidental countries, what about women’s rights in Arabic peninsula for instance ? In many families, girls are considered as
houseworkers and can’t go to school and learn like boys.
Through many facts, from the XIXth Century to nowadays, the evolution of people’s mentalities helps to the evolution of the laws and finally to the women’s rights. Even the full equality does not exist yet everywhere, women’s rights has evolved. We can quote Barack Obama « Today woman still made only 77cents to every man’s dollar, and the pay gap is even wilder for woman of colour » So we can linked this notion to Myths and Heroes, for instance Rosa Parks was an American Black woman who was fighting against racism.

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Today I’m going to speak about the notion of the idea (notion and idea are same in meaning they only vary in degree) of progress which is the process of
improvement or development (the gerund form implies that it is an action that is done) closer to attaining certain goals. There are several
areas: we have (not necessary to include this part) scientific progress, environmental progress, or social
progress. I’m going to talk about social progress and focus on the women’s
rights.

Has there been any real progress in women's rights since the XIXth (19th) Century?
First, I’m going to talk about the development (recognition) of women’s rights in the XIXth (19th) Century and in a 2nd (the second)( when a noun is modified with an ordinal number (first, second, third etc) the it becomes unique and takes up the article “the”) part, I will explain the limits of their rights (full stop)

In the (19th )XIXth Century, women were considered inferior to men. In fact, (comma: introductory phrases, clauses and words are followed by commas) men had power over them, they were not treated on an (words that begin with a vowel sound take the article “an”) equal footing; for instance, in terms of wages, women were paid less. As we have studied in class, in the extract from Made in Dagenham, Mrs. O’Grady and her co-workers, are fighting for an equal pay between men and women. However, since the beginning of the nineties, women’s salaries have gradually approached those of men. Thanks to the Matrimonial Property Act, contraception, abortion and divorce became possible since
1968. We also learn that abortion became possible in France in 1975 thanks to
one woman, Simone Veil. And in many countries, women gained the right vote especially since the XXth 20th Century.



However, this progress has limits: there is always  the glass ceiling. This is especially so because there are discriminatory barriers that prevents women from rising to positions of power; very few women rise to leadership positions. In addition, that there are many jobs which are less readily available because they are considered as a “man’s job,” like in medicine or business. After looking at the progress of women’s rights in the occidental countries, we may ask: is the same progress experienced in the Arabic peninsula? In many families in the Arab countries, girls are considered as
house-workers and can’t go to school or access education like their male counterparts. From the beginning of the 20th century to date, there has been an evolution in the mentalities of the population and consequently on laws governing women’s rights. This has had a massive influence on how women are treated and has finally led to women attaining their rights in the society.  However, full equality does not exist yet, however much women’s rights has evolved. We can quote Barack Obama; “Today women still make only 77cents to every man’s dollar, and the pay gap is even wilder for woman of colour” (use quotation marks). Hence we can link this to the notion of Myths and Heroes, for instance Rosa Parks was an American Black woman, who became a hero for her fight against racism.