Bonjour, j'aimerais que quelqu'un vérifie ma biogarphie sur John Lennon , vérifie l’autographe , le sens des phrases, des choses à rajouté ect ...
Merci d'avance !

My
favorite music is Imagine by John Lennon


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John Lennon was born 9
october 1940 in Liverpool in a night of German bombing, from a
separate family . His father left the family when John was only five
years old and his mother is unable to care for him ,it is High by his
Aunt Mimi . John was a turbulent and unruly child .

This does not preclude
that it becomes a perfect musician and singer for music pop and rock
.
Is it particularly known
for being the founder of the band The Beatles.
In years 1962 , he married
with Cynthia Powell ,his first wife, they had a boy , Julian .
In 1969 , he married again
with Yoko Ono, they had a boy , Sean .
In 1970 John Lennon
released the single Imagine, who knows a real success.
He died 8 December 1980,
killed by five bullets in his body.


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2014-09-20T16:14:55+02:00
My
favorite music is Imagine by John Lennon 


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John Lennon was born on 9th of
october 1940 in Liverpool in a night of German bombing, from a
separate family . His father left the family when John was only five
years old and his mother was unable to take care of him. He was raised by his
Aunt Mimi . John was a turbulent and unruly child . 

This did not preclude that he became a perfect musician and singer for pop and rock music.
He is particularly known
for being the founder of The Beatles band.
In years 1962 , he married Cynthia Powell ,his first wife and they had a boy called Julian .
In 1969 , he was married again, but this time, with Yoko Ono and they had a boy called Sean.
In 1970 John Lennon
released the single Imagine, who knew a real success in that time.
He died 8 December 1980, killed by five bullets who went through his body.

Voilà
As-tu trouvé beaucoup de fautes ? :3
Pas beaucoup, il y a des petites fautes de l'emploi du temps( tu as écrit des trucs au présent alors qu'il est mort) sinon le reste est bien :)
Ok , merci , ça me rassure ! :)
2014-09-20T16:37:34+02:00
C bon mail il ya des mot que tu pourais remplacer