Bonjour,

Je dois écrire un conte de fée détourné en Anglais et j'ai donc choisi de réécrire le Petit Chaperon Rouge qui devient Le Petit Loup Noir et le Méchant Chaperon Rouge. J'ai rédigé le conte et j'aimerais savoir si il n'y a pas trop de fautes. Merci d'avance pour votre aide.

The Little Black Wolf and the Evil Red Riding Hood.

Once upon a time, a little black wolf walked in the forest. He went to see his family in his lair. He held proudly in his mouth a prey he brought to his sick grandmother. On the way back, he met a little girl dressed in red with an angelic air. The girl stopped and asked where he was going. Little Wolf answered that he joined his family. So the girl advised him another path. Little Wolf went on his way and arrived at his lair. He saw his grandmother lying and he placed the prey he had captured. He found his grandmother odd. He discovered it was actually the little girl. She pulled out a gun and threatened to kill him. The greatest hunter of the pack arises and saved the little wolf. He crunched the girl and freed the grandmother who was gagged a few meters away. Since the pack no longer had any problems and they lived happily the rest of their lives.

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2014-04-27T18:42:36+02:00

The Little Black Wolf and the Evil Red Riding Hood.

Once upon a time, there lived a little black wolf who decided to visit his family which lived in the forest. He was going to see them in their lair while holding  proudly in his mouth a prey he was going to bring to his sick grandmother as present.
 On his way , he met a little girl dressed in red having an angelic air. The girl stopped and asked  him where he was going. Little Wolf answered that he was going to join  his family. So the girl advised him another path. Little Wolf went on his way and when he arrived at the lair, he saw his grandmother lying so panicked , he  placed the prey he had captured on the floor. He found his grandmother odd. He discovered that  the little girl was the autor of all of this.
 Since she was just from being discovered , she pulled out a gun and threatened to kill him. At that moment , a great forest hunter  arised suddently  and saved the little wolf. The hunter crunched the girl and rescued  the grandmother who was gagged a few meters away. Since there are no longer any problem  in the forest and everyone lived happily till the end of time.


il y avait beaucoup de fautes de temps et vous confondez park et forest j'espère vous avoir aidé.