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After the disaster that happened to the windmill, a big improvement
accured on the reconstruction. Every animal was working
very hard for a long period of time every day .They wanted to achieve their
main goal. They've also added more details to improve the windmill. They worked
twice has hard to make it more durable then it was at the beginning. Unfortunately,
there were many problems that occurred with
the farms .The nearest farms wanted to take control of the animal farm and
chase all of the creatures out. We also heard a lot of rumors, that Frederick
and his troop were plotting to attack Animal Farm and to destroy the windmill. After
hearing all these threats, Napoleon started to take some security measures to
prevent any disasters involving the
windmill. The rumors were true. A morning, Frederick came and tried to take
full control on Animal Farm. That's when the
battle had started between the animals and Frederick's mens and dogs. They
came in and opened fire on the animals and a large amount of animal were already wounded
and needed help. The mens were quickly able to get pass the animals and two men
had brought a crowbar and were planning to take down the windmill. But they
finally realised that the windmill was too strong, which made it impossible to
bring down. Yet the troop didn't give up. They were going to put some blasting
powder into a hole on the windmill. A few moments later, the windmill was
broken into small pieces. The windmill was no longer existing and the animals
came back in the fight and started attacking the mens. The animals were trying their
best to chase they're enemies down. Sadly, many creatures were instantaneously wounded.
A cow, three sheeps and two gooses were killed and even our Leader was beaten. He
had the tip of his tail chipped by a pellet. Luckily , the nine dogs of
Napoleon had flanked the troop and overtook them. The mens were chased out the
farm. They then decided to rebuild the windmill. This was a big achievement for
all the animal so they decided to celebrate this big victory by naming this The
Batlle of the windmill. To finish off, we should thank our wonderful leader to
have saved us and lead us to this magnificent defeat.

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2014-02-06T06:16:21+01:00
After the disaster that happened to the windmill, a big improvement occurred on the reconstruction.
Every animal was working very hard for a long period of time every day .They wanted to achieve their main goal. They've also added more details to improve the windmill. They worked twice has hard to make it more durable than it was at the beginning. Unfortunately, there were many problems that occurred with the farms .The nearest farms wanted to take control of the animal farm and chase all of the creatures out. We also heard a lot of rumors, that Frederick and his troop were plotting to attack Animal Farm and to destroy the windmill. After hearing all these threats, Napoleon started to take some
The men were quickly able to get pass the animals and two men had brought a crowbar and were planning to take down the windmill. But they finally realised that the windmill was too strong, which made it impossible to bring down. Yet the troop hasn't given up. They were going to put some blasting powder into a hole on the windmill. A few moments later, the windmill was broken into small pieces. The windmill was no longer existing and the animals came back in the fight and started attacking the men. The animals were trying their best to chase their enemies down. Sadly, many creatures were Sadly, many creatures were instantaneously wounded.
 A cow, three sheep and two geese were killed and even our Leader was beaten. He had the tip of his tail chipped by a pellet. Luckily , the nine dogs of Napoleon had flanked the troop and overtook them. The men were chased out the farm. They then decided to rebuild the windmill. This was a big achievement for all the animals so they decided to celebrate this big victory by naming this TheBatlle of the windmill. To finish off, we should thank our wonderful leader to have saved us and lead us to this magnificent defeat.This was a big achievement for all the animals so they decided to celebrate this big victory by naming this The
Battle of the windmill. To finish off, we should thank our wonderful leader to have saved us and lead us to this magnificent defeat.This was a big achievement for all the animals so they decided to celebrate this big victory by naming this The
Battle of the windmill.