Pouvez vous me corriger ce texte merci


I celebrated my birthday on 01.12.2014. I invited my best girlfriend’s class’s yujiao Oceane and Carla. Saturday the fifteenth January 2014. We went to the bowling of Dorlisheim . We played two parties bowling. Yujiao won the first parties about sixty records and the second parties Carla won about 100 records. Yujiao is a really champion of bowling. My friends and I are very athletic and our favorite sport is bowling. We had a great bowling game that's why it was a great day
After this, we returned back home. My mother and my twin sister had prepared cakes, cookies and brownies because we are also greedy. We drank and ate candies and Champomy.
My friends gave me many presents, DVD perfume and books by Agatha Christy. That’s my favorite books. I was very happy on my birthday day.
In the late afternoon we played Wii Party. On this CD is a lot of games like canoeing boxing etc. ..... We really enjoyed.

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2014-01-23T20:09:01+01:00
Pour ceux qui disent que j'ai "simplement copié le texte", et bien non, je l'ai corrigé. En tout cas merci au modérateur qui m'a fait perdre du temps pour rien, bref ... (dans ce texte, en plus, il y avait très peu de fautes) c'est pour cela que l'on s'est dit que j'ai simplement copié collé, alors pour voir là où sont les fautes je les mets en gras, ok ? Merci et cordialement. 

I celebrated my birthday on 01.12.2014. I invited my best girlfriend’s class’s yujiao Oceane and Carla. Saturday the fifteenth January 2014. We went to the bowling of Dorlisheim. We played two parties bowling. Yujiao won the first parties about sixty records and the second parties Carla won about 100 records.  Yujiao is a really champion of bowling. My friends and I are very athletic and our favorite sport is bowling. We had a great bowling game that's why it was a great day.
After this, we returned back home. My mother and my twin sister had prepared cakes, cookies and brownies because we are also greedy. We drank and ate candies and Champomy.
My friends gave me many presents, DVD perfume and books by Agatha Christy. That’s my favorite books. I was very happy on my birthday day.
In the late afternoon we played Wii Party. On this CD are a lot of games like canoeing boxing etc. ..... We really enjoyed.

Voilà un texte sans fautes, normalement.