Bonsoir tout le monde. Aujourd'hui je poste ce devoir en vous demandant un peu d'attention.
Je dois faire un exercice en anglais sur les fans de Michael Jackson, et pour sa j'aurai besoin de votre aide en me corrigeant et en me disant les choses à corriger ou à enlever. Sa me serait d'une grande utilité merci :)

Ce que j'ai fais:

Hello, my name is Dany Brookes. I come from Los Angeles. I am 20 years old and i am American.
My professional activity is the journalism in the fashion, and I study the philosophy.
Michael Jackson is one of my biggest fan.
I like the wah he expresses himself by singing, the energy which he gives by dancing. I appreciate his kindness which he carries to his numerous fans. I have very special musical tastes like many pop and the jazz. It is really my preferences. I listen to sometimes of the rock, but very rarely.
Today, i really wish to join your broadcast : "memory" of micheal Jackson, his would be one of my biggest dreams.

Thank you to have taken time to have read my letter
Cordiaĺly.

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il y'a quelque fautes,je te corrige: .....I'm a fashion journalist and I study philosophy. I'm one of the biggest fan of MJ.......I really like pop and jazz music..but I listen sometimes rock..... it would be my biggest dream. le reste est juste
y'a pas trop de faute, parcontre tu met ...... met plutôt ... c'est qu'un détaille mais c'est déjà sa

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2014-01-07T19:18:00+01:00
C'est bien sauf à un moment tu as écrit "Michael Jackson est l'un de mes plus grands fans." Sauf que c'est l'inverse, non?