Salut tout le monde ! Voici ce que j'ai écrit pour mon devoir d'anglais ( "créer un texte racontant une excursion dans la nature, a la maniere du texte étudié en classe") et je voudrais savoir si cela ne vous dérengeriez pas de corriger les erreurs ?!

Merci !! :)

29 November 2013

It was a rainy day, not amazing for November ! But my desire to go for a walk in woods had no change for that. My mother said that it was too much cold, but for me, it was the ideal temperature.

I put my yellow anorak, and my favorite rainy boots and I left accompanied only with a backpack containing my favorite chocolate bars !

On the road, I saw some squirrels, birds and lizards but nothing very fascinating …

When I entered in the forest, I heard a flash of lightning. A drizzle fall on my shoulders.

I continued to walked when I saw the leaves of bushes to move. Just later , a sound of heavy footsteps was listened. Maybe it was the storm ?

Steps moved closer more and more until I found me in front of a wild boar. I did not know what to do. Panicked, I left my bag. I run away. After some meters of running, I saw that this animal had torn my bag and it was eating my chocolate bars.

I will never come back in woods with food …

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2013-11-03T13:33:00+01:00
- 29 November 2013         
 It was a rainy day, not amazing for November! But my desire to go for a walk in woods had no change for that. My mother said that it was too cold, but for me, it was the ideal temperature.


I put my yellow anorak, and my favorite rainy boots and I left accompanied only with a backpack containing my favorite chocolate bars ! 
         
On the road, I saw some squirrels, birds and lizards, but nothing very                       fascinating …


When I entered in the forest, I heard a flash of lightning. A drizzle fall on my               shoulders.I continued to walk when I saw the leaves of bushes to move. Just later , a sound of heavy footsteps was listened. Maybe it was the storm ?         
Steps moved closer more and more until I found me in front of a wild boar. I did not know what to do. Panicked, I left my bag. I run away. After some meters of running, I saw that this animal had torn my bag and it was eating my chocolate bars.
 I will never come back in woods with food … 
2013-11-03T15:35:00+01:00
Le d dans change parce que c'est un participe passé